i fell
i fell
headlong and blind
out of control
maybe out of my mind
but inside my soul…
i felt
invincible
so deeper i dove
reckless, vulnerable and exposed
headfirst
nose open and eyes closed
i fell
under prepared and overwhelmed
i fell
not quite scared and under a spell
i fell
judgment impaired and reason impaled
i fell
into fate i stared and into chance i sailed
i fell
hard and fast
i was cast into a haze of lazy logic
i could not understand problem
or formulate a plan to solve it
i couldn’t run, walk or stand
i was even crawling
damn
i was simply…falling
hopin' it was soft where i land
hopin' i could keep floatin’
for second
i coulda sworn i was almost flying
feelin' free, unmasked and open
suddenly without warning
i crashed
and awoke broken
© 2006 DLM
headlong and blind
out of control
maybe out of my mind
but inside my soul…
i felt
invincible
so deeper i dove
reckless, vulnerable and exposed
headfirst
nose open and eyes closed
i fell
under prepared and overwhelmed
i fell
not quite scared and under a spell
i fell
judgment impaired and reason impaled
i fell
into fate i stared and into chance i sailed
i fell
hard and fast
i was cast into a haze of lazy logic
i could not understand problem
or formulate a plan to solve it
i couldn’t run, walk or stand
i was even crawling
damn
i was simply…falling
hopin' it was soft where i land
hopin' i could keep floatin’
for second
i coulda sworn i was almost flying
feelin' free, unmasked and open
suddenly without warning
i crashed
and awoke broken
© 2006 DLM
posted by iron at 4:14 PM
21 Comments:
good one. didn't expect that ending.
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I fell, I've fallen, shit I've dayum near broke my neck so guess what! I'm ok! But this piece reminds of a relationship where you think things are goin good and you're happy and the next thing you know, it's over. Just like that! Funny how that happens.
p, mo - yeah i was trying to express that feeling. thinking everything is well and good and next thing ya know...bam! out of nowhere.
j.b. - this one is new. i know which one you're thinking of though.
Very nice piece. I'm all too familiar with that feeling of running into a brick wall or traveling a beautiful scenic road only to find a dead end.
Beautiful poem..when reading is like almost feel the sensation of falling..
like in a dream, when you dream that you fall and when crushing you awake..
Very impressive.And powerful.
Another wonderful piece. The energy of it made me feel like I was running, stopping, looking, and running again; almost like I was dodging something. The last five lines really moved me...I've been those lines.
I just realized you commented on the story I posted (Rendezvous). I had no idea that anyone had dug through my archives. (blush) Thank you for checking it out and for your kind and inspiring words.
LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT!! And I actually got it with my dense azz self. That shyt was hott...definitely one of my favorties, because of the profound truth in it. It happens to all of us...unfortunately to often. I see you man...keep dropping, cause I'ma keep reading!
This was hot...and I felt the heat from it. I'm with Royce ~ I'll be here, so keep bringin' 'em! :D
~Trish
I definitely know what it means to fall in love, think everything is all good and then suddenly...the hard and fast break. Just have to realize that person wasn't for you.
Yeah. The good ole crash. Unfortunately the emotional crash is similar to breaking a physical bone. The wound becomes calcified, covered with scar tissue. It takes a lot to scrap away the scar tissue and forget the break. It's hard to get back on the bike after a horrible crash. I get back on the bike every now and then, but I never forget my helmet or knee pads. I definitly don't forget my jock strap. Women like hitting below the belt.
Scrivo
This is the BEST piece I've read from you so far.
WOW!
This is so deep and profound.
Do you even know how real this poem is?
Oh yes...and...
when is your book coming out? when are you going to perform your poetry at an open mic in the DC area?!? lol =)
I'm forreal!!
What a heartfelt poem! No matter what we're falling into, the end result is always the same. We always crash and burn
@ Scrivo...I overstand what you are saying. First time for everything right. ;o) Just kidding.
Getting back on the bike is scary. Glad you were able to get back on. For some people it's much harder.
makes me think about that line in the movie "crash" where they talk about how we're all just crashing into each other to feel something... this piece is nice. i love when a writer provokes self-reflection from the reader...i will definitely be back...OFTEN! :-)
~fallen angel
KUDOS
WOW, this is amazing! Really, you did a great job, I'm speechless!
You know I weigh the "judgement impaired" euphoria and the numb pain of the impact. I will venture and choose the euphoria and will mend the pain later.
I need a brotha that makes me lose it! I am at my best as a woman when I am 'LOST'
I fell...I like how you use it and could felt it.
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